The Ghost of Sently Lake

Chapter1
Liz Lessley clung to the side of the steep cliff, trying to calm her racing heart and think. Elizabeth rose lessley is a 7th grader at bosley middle school in wessfield, texas. She has always had an adventurous side and has gotten in trouble numerous times because of this. That morning she was sitting in one of her favorite spots by the cliff when she slipped and found herself dangling off the cliff!
"help! Anybody? help!" she screamed. How do I get myself into this stuff she thought as she struggled to hold on. Meanwhile back at Liz's house there were other problems!
"Where is she? She was supposed to be home an hour ago!" Mrs. lessley exclaimed
"Don't worry honey i'm sure she's fine!" Mr.lessley said comfertingly
"How do you know that she could be dangling off a cliff for all we know!"

do you want to hear more? if so post!

I think you started off wayyy too fast. You shoudl capitalize all the names and places also, and more punctuation. You should also make it a bit more clear. for example:
How do I get myself into this stuff she thought as she struggled to hold on.
I got confused for a second. Instead of that, use italics. Example:
How do I get myself into this stuff? she thought as she struggled to hold on.
You shouldn't say, "The cliff" the first time, because we don't know what cliff or anything.

But, hey, its really interesting! You have a really good idea! But try to make everything clear, and maybe even more long.
;]

you mean like this?:
Chapter1
Liz Lessley clung to the side of the steep cliff, trying to calm her racing heart and think! Elizabeth Rose Lessley is a 7th grader at Bosley middle school in Wessfield, Texas. She has always had an adventurous side and has gotten in trouble numerous times because of this. That morning she was sitting in one of her favorite spots by the cliff when she slipped and found herself dangling off the cliff!
"help! Anybody? help!" she screamed. How do I get myself into this stuff she thought as she struggled to hold on. Meanwhile back at Liz's house there were other problems!
"Where is she? She was supposed to be home an hour ago!!" Mrs. Lessley exclaimed
"Don't worry honey i'm sure she's fine!!" Mr. Lessley said comfertingly
"How do you know that she could be dangling off a cliff for all we know!!"

also this isn't all i've written so far! i just wanted to see how you liked it! there is still the rest of chapter 1 and near to the middle of chapter 2 to go!!!!!!!!

do you want to hear more?

Better ;]
and i know, talya, you told me.
and yes i would...

right!

lol =]

Hey,
I dont know what masha finds wrong with it...
It is really fast paced and interesting...
I like the humor
Quote:
She could be hanging off a cliff for all we know!!!

That made me lol out loud... (sorry there was this dorky guy that got a computer, and he did not know what lol means, so he is like: That made me lol... out loud!!!)